你是不是也这样?
刚拿到“写一篇关于我这一周的英语作文,5句话”的作业,笔尖悬在纸上——
- *第一句写什么?时态用一般过去式还是现在完成?**
- *“I played basketball”和“I played basketball with my friend after school”哪句更像真人写的?**
别急,咱们拆开来看。这
不是考语法默写,而是考你怎么用最基础的词,讲出真实、有温度的一周。
# 先搞清楚:5句≠随便凑5行
老师真正想看到的,是:
- ? 时间线索清晰(周一到周末,或按事件顺序)
- ? 主语统一但动词不重复(别全用“I did…”连着来)
- ? 每句带1个具体细节(不是“I ate food”,而是“I ate dumplings my mom made”)
- ? 自然过渡(用and / but / then / because轻轻一搭,句子就活了)
我自己批改过30多份初一学生的周记,发现90%的孩子卡在第二点——不是不会写,是怕“错”,结果越缩越小,最后五句全是“I… I… I…”。其实,老师更在意你敢不敢用对的词讲对的事,而不是每个动词都精准变形。
# 真实案例对比(来自学生原稿)
? 原始版(常见问题):
I went to school. I studied English. I watched TV. I slept early. I am happy.
? 升级版(只改结构+加细节,没换难词):
- On Monday, I walked to school because the bus was late.
- In English class, Ms. Lee asked me to read the new dialogue — my voice was a little shaky!
- After dinner, I watched *Blue Planet* with my little brother and we argued about which fish was cooler.
- I fell asleep at 9:15 p.m., still holding my math notebook open.
- This week felt short… but full.
你看,没用一个超纲词,但画面、情绪、节奏全有了。关键是:每句开头换了方式(On Monday / In English class / After dinner…),动词也分了层次(walked / asked / watched / fell asleep / felt)。
# 新手三步速成法(亲测有效)
- 先掏口袋:写下你这周真实发生的3件小事
(比如:“周三忘带作业本”“周五放学捡到一只迷路的小猫”“每天早上被闹钟吓醒两次”)
- 给每件事配一个“谁+干了啥+加1个味道/声音/感觉”
→ “I forgot my homework on Wednesday” → “I forgot my homework on Wednesday — and my stomach dropped when Mr. Chen asked for it.”
- 用“but / because / then / so”串两句,制造呼吸感
→ “I woke up late. But I still caught the 7:25 bus.”
→ “My cat jumped on my keyboard. So my ‘My Week’ draft turned into ‘meowmeowmeow’.”
- *不用追求完美,先让句子有体温**。你写的不是范文,是你自己的一周。
# 最后一点真心话
我教英语八年,越来越相信:语言不是砌墙,是种花。
5句话不是要你垒出多高的语法塔,而是埋下5颗能发芽的种子——
一颗是时间(when),一颗是动作(what),一颗是人(who),一颗是细节(how/why),一颗是你的态度(feel)。
哪怕第五句只是“I think next week will be better.”——只要它是你心里真冒出来的,它就有力量。
写作这事,不怕慢,怕停;不怕短,怕空。你今天写下的5句,就是你英语世界里,第一片自己踩实的土地。
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